Hi welcome to my blog post. This is my narrative writing this was 40 minutes work. It is about a pickpocketer and an assassin
Wednesday 27 May 2020
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Kia-ora Lucas! It's me, Hana! Your post police buddy!
ReplyDeleteI see that you have posted yet, another blog post! I see that you have explained how long you have taken on your writing piece and what it is about. I also have noticed that you have an introduction. Most people don't have introductions, so well done!
I think when I was little, I pointed out that Dad could get pickpocketed because he had his wallet in his back pocket. But he just said that he wouldn't get pickpocketed, and if he was going to a place where there were dodgy people, he would move his wallet somewhere else. -_-
Something that you could improve on is putting your DLO on there. I can imagine that you're in the middle of making one, so I'll wait until you finish. Something that you could improve on what you have here is that you could try explaining more. Like why you did it, or something like that. Also, you made a small spelling mistake with the work "writing" and "narrative."
Keep up the good work!
-Hana
(I meant WORD. Not word in the 3rd paragraph ;-;)
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